TSI Concluding Paragraph Paradigms (w/ Examples)

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SUPER SIMPLE PARADIGM

Although it is demonstrably correct that _____________ (⇦ your opinion), 

some have argued _____________ (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds).

However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by the fact that ________________ (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false).   

Therefore, in the long run, _______   (⇦ your opinion).

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SUPER SIMPLE PARADIGM ALTERNATE 1st SENTENCE  

Although (⇦ your opinion) is demonstrably correct , 

some have argued _____________ (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds).

However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by the fact that ________________ (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false).   

Therefore, in the long run, _______   (⇦ your opinion).

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EXAMPLE (when a proposed change is at the crux of the issue at hand)

Prompt: Most public schools do not require that their students wear a uniform. This should change. School uniforms should be mandatory for public school students. Agree or disagree?

Magic words for a persuasive essay involving a proposed change  (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds): 

(The side that wants change - Uniforms SHOULD be required/mandated)  

some have argued it is best to maintain the status quo     

 OR  

(the side that does NOT want change - Uniforms should NOT be required/mandated)  

some have argued that a change is needed  

Persuasive Essay Involving a Proposed Change - TOPIC: School Uniforms

Mandatory School Uniforms     change

OR 

Uniforms in School Should NOT be Mandatory   status quo

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BRAINSTORM (NO CHANGE - NO UNIFORMS)

Reasons to support Uniforms in School Should NOT be Mandatory

• Expensive  

• Uncomfortable

• Creates visible division between schools

• If lose part of a uniform, not easily replaced (you cannot do without)

• Uniforms often have to be dry cleaned

• Hard to put on

• Hard to clean

• Sometimes do not go with the weather

• Easy to be identified  (by bad guys!)

• Students are not allowed to express their individual creativity through dress.  → stifles creativity 

BRAINSTORM (CHANGE - YES UNIFORMS)

Reasons to support Mandatory School Uniforms

• Not as expensive as most school wardrobes

• Easy to be identified (field trip and staying together!)

• Very formal / create studious atmosphere

• Create community (camaraderie)  “in the same boat”

• Promotes school pride

• Cuts down on bullying based on who has “better clothes”

• More efficient mornings / easier to prepare for school

• Uniforms decrease the ease of hiding contraband.

• More durable  (last longer bc the material is more sturdy)

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 THE “TSI CONCLUSION” FOR A PERSUASIVE ESSAY THAT ASSERTS (no change) UNIFORMS SHOULD NOT BE MANDATORY

Although it is demonstrably correct that school uniforms should be mandatory in public schools  (⇦ your opinion),  some have argued it is best to maintain the status quo.  (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds) However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by the fact that uniforms are formal, they cut down on bullying, and are more durable.   (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false)    Therefore, in the long run, school uniforms should be required in schools   (⇦ your opinion) 

 THIS IS AYANNA’S “TSI CONCLUSION” FOR A PERSUASIVE ESSAY THAT ASSERTS (change) UNIFORMS SHOULD NOT BE MANDATORY

Although it is demonstrably correct that school uniforms should not be mandatory in public schools  (⇦ your opinion),  some have argued that a change is needed.  (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds) However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by the fact that uniforms create division between schools, it is too easy for predators to identify students in uniforms, and students are creatively stifled.   (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false)    Therefore, in the long run, school uniforms should not be required in schools   (⇦ your opinion) 

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Try these other "fill in the blanks" paradigms. The words in red are extra lines.

SUPER-DUPER SIMPLE VERSION:

Although (⇦ your opinion)  is demonstrably correct, some have argued that (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds). 

This is because they think that  (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds). 

However, this  viewpoint is false because  (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false).  

Therefore, in  the long run,  (⇦ your opinion).  

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ADDED LINES (CLOSEST TO THE TSI PARADIGM):

Although (⇦ your opinion)  is demonstrably correct, some have argued that (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds), 

believing that (⇦ a rewording or overarching reason that the opposition holds).   

However, this  viewpoint on  the present issue is negated by (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false). 

Rather, (⇦ soundly counter their weak reason). Therefore, in the long run, (⇦ your opinion).  

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What might that look like in an essay?  

Here is an example of what a conclusion might look like if an essay was about mandatory school uniforms (and you took the "pro-uniform" stance - no change). You should work in your reworded thesis statement. 

NOTE: this paragraph is instill needs a SPECIFIC example:

Although requiring school uniforms is demonstrably the best choice, some have argued 
that the change is not justifiable, believing that maintaining the status quo is easier. 

However, uniforms are more cost effective over the course of the year, they
create camaraderie, and streamline daily preparation for the school day. 

Rather, the advantages of mandatory school uniforms are well worth changing the status quo. Therefore, in the long run, school uniforms are the easier and the best option for students.

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This conclusion assumes the  (thesis statement) 3 REASONS were:
1. uniforms save money
2. uniforms create camaraderie (a sense of community)
3. uniforms make it easier to get ready for school

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Here is an example of what a conclusion might look like if an essay was about mandatory school uniforms (and you took the "NO-uniform" stance - make the change) 

BRAINSTORM (NO CHANGE - NO UNIFORMS)

Reasons to support NO Mandatory School Uniforms

squelches individual creative expression

they are uncomfortable which interferes with concentration

not worth the cost bc the durability cannot be guaranteed

the uniforms make it easier to hide contraband 

a uniform makes a student an easier target for predators

PARADIGMS USED BY THE  NEXT STUDENT EXAMPLES:

Although   (⇦ your opinion)  is demonstrably correct, some have argued that (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds), 

believing that (⇦ a rewording or overarching reason that the opposition holds). 

However, this viewpoint on the  present  issue is negated  by (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false). 

Rather,  (⇦ soundly counter their weak reason). Therefore, in the long  run,   (⇦ your opinion) .

OR

Although   (⇦ your opinion)  is demonstrably correct, some have argued that (⇦ the opinion (broadly stated) that the opposition holds), 

This is  because they think that  (⇦ a rewording or overarching reason that the opposition holds). 

However, this viewpoint is false because   (⇦ thesis statement reworded- reasons this is false).  

Therefore, in the long run,   (⇦ your opinion).  

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Jessie  (YES, UNIFORMS SHOULD BE MANDATORY - YES CHANGE)

               (BODY PARAGRAPH EXAMPLE) 

Although not requiring school uniforms is demonstrably correct, some have argued that school uniforms are for the best, believing that school uniforms would make back-to-school shopping cheaper. However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by the fact that school uniforms are not worth the cost because the quality of the uniforms can not be guaranteed, they squelch individual creative expression, and it makes it easier for predators to figure out who is a student. Rather, requiring school uniforms would make back-to-school shopping more expensive and will give the student an uncomfortable outfit that she or he will be forced to wear for an entire year. Therefore, in the long run, school uniforms should not be required.

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Emily  (NO UNIFORMS - NO CHANGE)

               (CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH)

Although school uniforms should not be required, some have argued that uniforms should be mandatory,  believing that this would solve a lot of problems.

However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by the fact that the uniforms may not be worth the cost because they might be made of cheap material, uniforms make students easier targets for predators, and allow for student creativity of expression.  Rather, wearing uniforms does not solve any problems. Therefore, in the long run, school uniforms should not be mandatory.

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Jonathan  (NO UNIFORMS - NO CHANGE)

                      (CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH)

Although mandating uniforms is not sensible, some have argued that uniforms stop bullying. This is because they mistakenly think that if everybody is dressed the same, people will not judge each other and bullying will end. However, this viewpoint is false because bullies will still pick on people about their hairstyle, jewelry, height, weight, or ethnicity. Rather than requiring uniforms, students should be allowed to choose their own attire which helps them feel empowered and confident. Therefore in the long run, uniforms should not be mandatory.

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Miya (NO UNIFORMS - NO CHANGE)

             (CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH)

Although not mandating uniforms is demonstrably correct, some have argued that uniforms are good. However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated because uniforms endanger students, prevent them from concentrating in class, and do not let students express themselves creatively. Therefore, in the long run, wearing uniforms should not be required.

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